Research Paper Revision

We got a lot of useful feedback from our instructor's advises sheet and our peer assistant activity. With those helps, I know exactly what I should do before I started to revise my paper. The commends on my paper are very brief, but enough. For example, the instructor said that I should elaborate more on my argument, and the "what, how, why" flows after the first argument are good. So that I know that the first argument is the one which I should focus on. After expand the argument and re-allocate the sentences, the logic flow of my first argument works much better, and the evidences are more powerful to support my argument. Also, I elaborated many of my other arguments.

Despite the helps that I mentioned above, another helpful activity is the counter argument writing activity. My rebuttal toward the counter argument in my draft paper is not clear and not strong. The brainstorm contained in the counter argument writing activity made up my mind and make everything clear for me to re-write my counter argument. I didn't change much of my words of my counter argument in my final paper; I just changed some languages to make my opinion more straight forward, and slightly changed the order of the sentences. With those small changes, my rebuttal seems much more powerful.

The last thing is that I didn't give any recommendations to my readers in the first draft. I stated some advised for the readers in my conclusion paragraph in my final paper to write a full period mark.